Jon and I got back from the North shore of the South Island of New Zealand yesterday. We were gone for a few days on a hiking/whiskey-drinking/music-writing expedition. We had already taken a crack at this song before we left but we re-thought it on the winding coastal roads. This song was written by Jon Dhama a few years ago but we've been working on re-writing the lyrics on this trip. The chorus has stayed true to his original song but the verse lyrics have become darker and maybe a bit more honest. We wrote another one while we were up North and I think we'll do a quick recording of it tomorrow morning.
You and I have dug a hole and it goes way down, many miles to this place that's underground, and our lives get filled with rain from the clouds. This dirty taste, this ain't what it was, but what the hell has happened down here can't be seen from above, with every storm I fear things won't be the same. I'll take a chance on anything but I need to hear the truth from you. You know how many times I've tried and it seems to me that you've cried for a guiding light on these moonless nights. Are you that same girl that I knew when I was young? Caroline, am I casting a broken line? Cause I won't let go, no I won't let go. Cold-hearted stones of this place are softened by your parted lips and your thirsty face. This place is way too much for me to bare alone. Two of a kind we tripped and fell and we went all the way down until those inner voices woke us so we could drown and sink into the life we knew, we knew we'd found. I'll take a chance on anything but I need to hear the truth from you. Cause you know how many times I've tried and it seems to me that you've cried for a guiding light on these moonless nights are you that same girl that I knew when I was young? Caroline, am I casting a broken line cause i won't let go, no I won't let go. And you see black and I see white. Are you that same girl that I loved when I was young? Caroline, you patched up my broken mind and I can't let go, no I can't let go.
Lyrics are decent. I prefer the parts where the guitar picking speeds up. I'm not so hot on the two places where the piano enters with three chords. The sound says: deliberate piano chords being played. Good job when you're both singing. It adds weight in a good way.
ReplyDeleteI like this. I'd also like to hear how it sounds with some sparse slide guitar, an instrumental break, some more background vocals (i.e. "oohs" and "ahhs") and a crescendo of the piano towards the end.
ReplyDeleteEnjoy this type of music with clear text and mixture of guitar/piano. Voices blend together which doesn't disturb the whole picture created. Look forward to more in the future.
ReplyDeletere: "The sound says: deliberate piano chords being played"
ReplyDeleteare you looking for the sound to tell you it's been played by accident?? I would assume most musicians make they're music deliberately...
why not enjoy it for fact that it convey's emotion? there's something to be said for simplicity...